Nightshade chronicls. Not in contest

Nightshade Chronicles: Book 1.
Intro.
It was a dark and stormy night on the ship. I watched carefully from my room. Hopefully, it doesn’t sink. I hoped. Apparently, my hopes were lost, because suddenly, I see the boat hit an iceberg. Oh great. I grab my life-jacket and put it on. I walk outside carefully, trying not to get wet. No such luck. I get drenched head to toe. I shiver. Then I realized all the lifeboats were gone, and looking over the edge, I also saw there was a bomb on the hull. The timer was already on 00:01. I yell out in surprise just before the bomb blows. The ship blows up.

This is just an excerpt of what I'm going to write, which is based on PJO. I'm going to try to get five into the series, but I'm not so positive. If you liked it say "I!". If you don't like it, say "Nay!" If most of you don't like it but if you like it I'll finish the rest.

Ehh, I sorta like it.

Moved too fast, and I entirely was bored.

Edit: Sorry, Fanfiction critic came over me.

Hmmm, it looks sorta like the titanic.

Nay.
Not enough description, and moved waaaaaaaaaaaaaay to fast.

Yes I know. I'm going to redo the whole entire thing.......