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PostSubject: My new CHARRIE   7/22/2012, 2:38 pm

Character Name: Christian Mortensen
Gender: Male
Age: 14

Description: Brown hair, brown eyes, fair skin, 5"2, average weight
Personality: cheerful, rarely in abad mood, the one that cheers you up, makes new friends quickly
God and mortal parent: Persephone and a mortal named Eleco
Powers: Can draw energy from flowers. But doing so kills the flower and make his mother mad. He can only draw energy from 20 flowers per day. He can transfer the energy from flowers to other people and make an orb out of it. The orb looks like a big flufffy cloud, but green. The bigger the flower is the more energy he can draw from it. It takes about 15 daises for him to regain his whole strengh
Flaws: looks on the positive side too much, invades people's privacy, uses his power to cheat in sports

Pets: a cat named Mr.Fluff
Weapon: CB Mace
Talents/Skills: gardening
RP Example: I was really tired and my legs were burning. I was at a district track meet running a mile. I saw a tiny dandelion growing a few feet from me. I took the energy out of it and instanly my legs felt a lot better. Then I begun to sprint. I had this race in the bag.
Biography*: Christian was born in Houston. When he was 4 weeks old his mother left. And his dad died when he was 5. Christian went to a foster home until he was 6. He was a adopted by a family in Pittsbrugh. He spent his the rest of his time there until he wass taken to CHB
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PostSubject: Re: My new CHARRIE   7/22/2012, 6:30 pm

It looks good, but there are a few problems.
First of all, you need to fill out all of the sections of the character form. You have to have at least three flaws, and you need to provide a description of their personality; are they typically evil or nice, are they good at making friends, et cetera. (Here's the link so you can look at it again. http://halfbloodmania.forumotion.net/t165-character-form )

Secondly, you need to be more specific about the powers. About how much energy can he draw from one flower? Please give an example. Also, how powerful are the orbs, and how much energy does it take for him to make one? How long until he can make another after the first?

And the last thing is just kind of me being nit picky, and is a suggestion, so you don't have to do it. His back story is kind of broad, and is like a lot of other campers. Most life before CHB stories give an insight as to how this person's life is different.

If you can get this done, it'll be an even better form.

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PostSubject: Re: My new CHARRIE   7/23/2012, 11:31 pm

EDITED. Also would you mind checking my other pending charrie
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PostSubject: Re: My new CHARRIE   7/24/2012, 12:14 am

It's a lot better now, but I still want to know about how much energy he can draw from one flower. Like, say he had just run a marathon. How many daisies would it take for him to regain his strength?

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PostSubject: Re: My new CHARRIE   7/24/2012, 12:53 am

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PostSubject: Re: My new CHARRIE   7/24/2012, 3:27 am

Okay, good enough.

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